Saturday, 29 October 2016

Story 188 Taking Care of our Visitors. Part Two



Joyce Tries Two Indians for Size.
        (The Scene:- At Hansini & Mootie’s house. Mootie & Brian with Joyce.)
Hi from Mootie,    
       I was not surprised how quickly Katrina got David to stay in her room - they did the same when she was in Perth. I think others might have noticed or heard about these living arrangements but nothing was said. Well not to me anyway. The official version - he slept in a made-up bed in the office downstairs but anyone could see that it was never used.
       Some say its bad luck to see your partner before the wedding but it seems that wasn’t concerning those two. Of course, when she left for her hometown before the actual wedding they were separate for a few days then.
       Now another nice surprise was when Hansini said we might have a European couple staying with us. At first, I had hoped Joseph and Lizamoa would stay here but no they were staying in the Big House. So now I thought it would be either Peter or Steve with their white wives, but once again I was wrong. This was a couple from Perth, Jeremy and Joyce, much younger than us. We had met them at the Resort in Australia. I also have seen the stories where they had played a bit when Katrina and Jeevan were in Perth then later played amongst themselves.
       For a moment I wondered what chance they might want to play here with us too. She was, how do you say - foxy, so I hoped so but I then decided to just wait and see what happened. If Hansini was interested then I knew she would work it out. Yes you men all know of this, leave it to the wives to sort out.

       I was away when they arrived but when I came home from my working, they were there to greet me. They got up when I entered the room and came forward to meet me. Jeremy greeted me and gave me a man hug, (where our bodies just touch briefly)Brian was much the same.
       Then Joyce came towards me. I don’t know this woman very well having hardly met her at the Resort in Australia. But I did notice she was good looking, with the hot body and seemed very friendly. Well, she stepped up to me and gave me a hug. Yes, a close one, not short either as her breasts pressed against me and her arms reaching to wrapped around me. It did seem a bit funny as she was much shorter and smaller than me but then most girls are smaller than me. Then she reached down and gave my bum a squeeze. I wasn’t expecting that!
       As she pulled way she said, “Thank you for opening your house to us Mootie.”
       “Thank you for staying with us,” I replied. “You both are welcome in our house.”
       I know that sounds rather formal after what had just happened, but that is the way things are done in India. Although I do think the hugging might have been taking things much further than I would for a normal visitor. Certainly, the bum touching was a bit naughty. When hugging is done in India, the girl holds her body back without the breasts touching, not like Joyce had just done with her pressing them firmly to me like she wanted me to feel and enjoy them.
        Of course, I’m more used to Mega so to hug my greeting to her was the natural thing to do. Mega is a lovely girl. She and her husband joined Sarvesh’s nude days at the same time as us. In fact, I had been the first man for her other than her husband. So in this way, we knew of each other well. So her hug was firmly against me as expected for two close friends of this state.

         My wife had already sent the servants off before I arrived. This having servants around is still a bit strange for me. I’m not sure I’m entirely comfortable with having strange people touching and doing things in my personal house but Hansini is happy with them and seems to run things well, I believe she has taken advice from Amita regarding this. They are only working during the day, returning to their own homes and families each night so I don’t really see much of them.
         Now I came to know that she had also cooked the food too. Usually, now one of the servant girls does the cooking now. I was very happy to have something from my wife and also I discovered that Mega had helped too.
         Well, we had dinner and then I was wondering what would happen next. But this is foolish thinking, as any husband should know, because when there are women, wives involved, they’ll have it worked out. More exactly, have worked it out before we men even knew we had a problem.
         So I was content to be relaxed and see where the things went. Whatever happened, with my wife involved, it would be good. This, I had informed to Brian earlier when Hansini sent us to the shops. 
         "There could be fun tonight," and he agreed with me. 
         So we sat on the couch and waited to see where this night was to go.
         Then my wife offered us to Joyce as a couple of ‘hot ones.’ What does is she thinking we are – hotdogs on a stick or something? LOL Or is it hotdogs with a stick?
         Well Brian’s wife, Mega, who had been sitting between us, got up to help Hansini get some more drinks. While she was gone, Joyce came over to take her place. It looked as if she just did it but I was sure my wife had a hand in it. Was it planned before? I think, yes. So it was beginning looking like Brian and I would get to fucking with this hot little white girl from Perth anyway. I had no worries with this.
         This was confirmed when the girls sitting each side of Jeremy discovered he was getting hard. They asked Joyce to check us too. It was surprising that she actually did give us a feel and also surprising when she told them we were getting hard which wasn’t exactly correct. When my wife suggested she gets us out I think that was a bit too much for Joyce. I also think she was considering us that we were not ready to be displayed yet.
          “Let’s go upstairs,” she whispered to me.
          To this, I was with full agreement.
          The girls across the room were surprised when they saw us getting up to leave. I wonder if they were considering we would all stay in the one room. We could have, it would have been fun to watch what our wives did to Jeremy but I was also happy to go off with Joyce.
         “We’re taking our room honey,” I told Hansini.
         I saw the moment of hesitation in her face then Hansini nodded yes. Maybe I should have given it to her but then I decided they can work something else out.

         Once Joyce was in the bedroom she wasn’t shy about getting into the fun.
       “Two big horny guys,” she said. “What am I going to do with you?”
       “Fuck us I hope,” Brian said, that made us all laugh.
       “Oh my pleasure,” she replied. “And I want a good fucking from both you guys too.”
       That was good, this small girl telling what she wanted. I like women like this.
       “That can be arranged,” Brian told her.
       She almost purred, “I hope so.”
       With that, we both reached for her and began to remove her clothes. There was not resistance to that, just her getting in our way by trying to remove ours too. Both Brian and I were keen to get her clothes off and get her naked. It would not be the first time we’d seen her naked as she had been with us on the nude cruise but this was going to be different. I’d checked out her hot little body then as she’d gone under the pole on the boat. Very nice too with a beautiful little light brown pussy but this time I fully intended doing more to that pussy than just looking.
        Soon the last of her clothes were coming off while she's got nothing off us. Brian was behind her undoing her bra while I reached up to pull it away. Oh, lovely little titties came into view. Very nice swelling peaks of pale white flesh crowned with those pink nipples. My hands went straight for them. Feeling my fingers sliding over smooth white flesh as I moved for her nipples. White girl nipples are mostly much smaller than the Indian girls.
        Meanwhile, Brian had continued and taken her panties off. It was then we discovered there was no pussy hair. She was totally bare, with just smooth flesh! Oh, that was so sexy too! One of the girls from New Zealand, Sharon, goes like that and now this girl was too. Totally sexy we were thinking.
        He was behind her with his body against her. His hands were reaching around and down for her pussy, while both my hands continued working to her bare breasts. Her nipples were hardened as I rubbed them between her fingers. His fingers were pressing into the opening of her pussy running between the swollen lips.
       She closed her eyes and gave a moan.
      I’m not sure if it was what I was doing or if Brian had found something but it was clear she was enjoying it. Getting horny with the hands of two men all over her, this was sure looking very promising.
       “Hey! Wake up,” I told her, giving her a slap onto her bum.
       Her eyes snapped open, “I’m not asleep!”
       Oh a bit of fight in her too. I like that.
       “Well, you have work to do girl. Our clothes are still on and we’re not taking them off.”
       “Oh! OK!” she said with a smile.
       She began to strip us but I was impressed how she did it. First, an item came off Brian and then one of me. Going back and forth between us as she progressively got us naked. I need to admit that with what we had been doing to her and now this, I was hard and ready to go.
      She came to the last item on Brian, pulling down his shorts to reveal his cock. Nice and hard for her. She stopped to admire him, her hands even going to touch and hold him a bit too. I could see the whiteness of her hand wrapped around his hard black shaft and I even considered that she might do more with him than just touching but not she was intending to stick to her game plan of stripping us both.
      Now she turned to me. “Let’s see what you’ve got.”
      “You’ve seen before,” I said.
      “Not like you are now.”
      “How am I now?”
      “Hard!” she replied.
      “How do you know that?”
      “You wouldn’t be bulging like that.”
      She had a point there. I was almost bursting out of my pants.
      Joyce was kneeling before me as she reached up and began to pull my pants down. I could see she had done this before as she took care to ease the pants over my swollen member. Then with a pull, they came down and my cock sprung out towards her.
       “Oh wow!” she exclaimed. “So big!”
       She reached for it, taking me with both hands. There was no doubt she was obviously impressed. I was sort of expecting a full work over but it was not much more than a quick explore before she moved on.
       “I want to try Brian first, and then I’ll be ready to try you, Mootie.”
       This girl is bold as she knows what she wants and was willing to tell us. I liked that and was happy to go along with it.
       “With two larger cocks to try, I think we better get you ready Joyce,” I said.
       “Get me ready?”
       “Yes. Nice and wet. Nice and juicy.”
       “Ok,” she agreed with a grin. “How will you do that?”
       I’m sure she knew how but just wanted us to tell her.
       “Will two hot guys, kissing and sucking, all over your body, might help?”
       “It might be helpful.”
       “What about some pussy licking?”
       “That sounds better.”
       This girl was playing hard to get. Wanting us to explain all the details for the sex we want with her. ‘Ok then,’ I thought.
       “I going to pull your juicy lips open and press my tongue in deeply,” I said.
       Brian added, “And long slow licks up and down.”
       Oh, she liked the idea of that. I saw her whole body give a shudder.
       So I decided to make her admit it.
       “Will that be good for you, Joyce?”
       She looked at me a bit strange.
       “Will that make you ready and juicy?”
       “I’m sure it will,” she replied, catching and playing the game.
       “Let’s do this thing?”

        So that was what we did for her. We pushed her back on the bed then while Brian went for her bare pussy I confined my attention to her breasts. I was taking turns, move from one nipple to the other. Licking and sucking both, making them hard and erect. Soon I was taking them deep into my mouth, taking in the whole nipple and part of her breasts in my sucking. She was enjoying that with her hands coming to hold my head against herself.
        Lower down, Brian as doing as we promised. First licking over the outside, down along her pussy lips, then pulling them open with his fingers so he could plunge his tongue, pressing deep between them. That was also getting to her. With all this attentions to her body, Joyce was moaning and enjoying. Her body began to wiggle and bucking back against us. Soon the moanings and gaspings were getting louder and I knew Brian was getting her close now.
       “Take her over Brian,” I said.
       He did. There were a couple of aggressive thrusts into her with his tongue and she gave a moan. He pressed in again and she humped back against him. His hand left her pussy, joining the other, each holding a cheek of her behind. Now he could really go at her, his hands gripping her and holding her against his face.
        She was close now. Almost to the bursting point.
       An extra loud moan became a cry as her body stiffened against him. Her legs clamped around his head and her back arched against him. She was bucking around and crying out as he continued eating her. It must have been a good one, maybe with a second peak as he held her and continuing to suck at her clitty with his lips.
       Finally, he let her go so she fell back against the bed and relaxed.

       Now that was a good start. Seeing that she was juiced up, it was time to start the fucking her. As she had asked, I let Brian go first. It also made sense since he was already sort of between her legs.
       He moved up and brought his cock to her and I heard a soft moan as he eased himself into her. From where I was I could watch as he pressed his cock in deeper. It took a couple of gentle pushes, more to get his cock wet than to open her.
        Now they began to fuck. I was surprised that he didn’t take to easy for a while, but no, they were straight into some aggressive sex. She seemed to take him ok so there were no worries there either. She seemed to welcome his sex to which was also good. So now I watched as Brian was pounding into her, driving his cock deep inside her.
        It soon became apparent it was having an effect on both of them. He was thrusting down at her while for a start she was humping back at him. This didn’t last long before she was bucking around underneath him soon becoming totally out of control.
        By now I knew she was moments away from another orgasm but I didn’t realise he was right behind her. She cums with a deep moaning cry. Hearing it sent a shudder through my body too. She bucked at him a few times and lay still as he finished filling her with cum. Letting out a few deep moans as his cock pumped into her.

        He had hardly rolled off her when she turned to me.
       “Your turn now,” she said.
       It surprised me how quickly she was ready for another man like that. But also, there was no need to tell me twice. I moved into the position Brian had left open, deep between her legs.
       When my turn came I took her the same way Brian had. I’m a big man so tried to keep my weight off her small frail body. I was also concerned not to hurt her with my cock size. But as the events unfolded I should not have worried as it seems she could easy take both my body weight and cock size. Let me tell of how.
       First I eased into her. In my case, she didn’t reach for me and I didn’t either. I used the body to line to her. The cock found the spot which was soft and gave way to me and I entered her. After Brian, she was a bit open anyway. At first, I was gentle, just going in a bit. Next time a bit more and then more. Soon I discovered she had stretched to take all of me. Amazing how she could do this a still be comfortable enough for love-games.
       She soon was responding to me. I am amazed how quickly she did this. Of course, this tight pussy was amazing for me too. It gripping me as I’m sliding in and out was great. Very nice feelings were being generated within my cock.
       She was soon becoming very noisy and vocal. Saying sexy things to encourage me more.
       “Fuck me…….Feel you cock in me…….Fuck my wet cunt……Fill my cunt with cum.”
       All so sexy hearing but I’m wondering why she didn’t do this with Brian too. It seems she was using different techniques with each of us. For him, it was active fucking back to him. For me, she was more passive in actions but using hot sexy vocal. This was interesting that she was doing that but very sexy too. I later found she had discovered my taste for this from the Letters Books. So it seems this girl had done her homeworking on us which was a good thing too. I was left wondering why I did not do this too.
       Now I began to increase the speed and force I was using. All the time I was watching for any sign of discomfort but no, quite the contrary, in fact. She was enjoying it. Enjoying a big cock filling her tight little pussy. To my surprise she soon humped back at me, telling me she wanted more so I finally decided to give her all I had.
       Her body was taking a lot more of my weight, her pussy was taking all of my cock but still she was ok with it. Of course, this tight pussy was doing amazing things for me soon and I suddenly realised I was almost there. Not like me, usually I can go on for a while and give the girl a bit of fun, but not this time. It was rushing at me now and was going to be a good one.
       I don’t know why fucking Joyce got me so sexually excited. Maybe it was doing it with a white girl. But I’d done that before with the New Zealand girls. Maybe it was someone new whom I’d never fucked before. But once again I’d tried many different girls in the last few years since we had joined Sarvesh’s nude days. Maybe it was she was so small and tight. But once again other girls such as Lizamoa, Jenny and Katrina had been too. Mostly likely it was all three that was driving my sexual energy. But the reality was fucking this hot sexy girl was a big turn-on for me.  
       We continued like that. Me driving down, deep into her pussy, her taking everything I could give her. Suddenly things went over the top when she began wriggling around under me, gasping and crying out as her second orgasm hit her. No, not second, her third.   
       This was all I could take of her. My cock gave its first ejection jerk as cum exploded into her. With jerk after jerk, I was pouring my man-juice into her. It seemed to go for so long until finally, my body was willing to relax.
       I withdrew from her and roll off to her side. For a while, we lay there looking at each other. Both out of breath, but soaking with the sweat of our exercise.
    
       That was a hot sexy session where both of us getting to be with her but now I suggested that we try a three-some. Of course, they were both agreeing to this.  
       We moved to a full on three-some. I lay back on the bed while Joyce came in to kneel beside me. She reached down for my cock, taking it with both hands, then with only a tiny bit of foreplay she brought it to her mouth.
      Oh, that felt good and soon it began to grow and stiffen again. I was surprised how quickly I recovered but it was sexually exciting trying with this new sexy white girl.
      She took me with her hand gripping my shaft and brought her head down to me. I felt her licking over and around my cock head which felt so incredibly nice. Of course, I felt because my eyes were closed in the enjoyment of it. Her lips touched me. They opened over me and took me into her mouth.
      Oh, that was good! Those lips around the head of my cock, gripping me, sucking me. Meanwhile, her hands went to my shaft, both hands, working and pumping me. This sexy girl was doing a great job with me.
      As I said above she was kneeling beside me with her behind pointing back towards Brian. He didn’t take long before he got the idea and his hand between went her legs working at her pussy. Not that it needed much as when she had finished with me a while before it was well juiced up. I could see the look on his face as he brought his cock to her and hearing the moan of the girl between us gave, told me he was entering her.
       So Joyce did get her three-some. She had a cock inside her at both ended as while she continued to suck me, Brian was fucking her.
       I must admit that I found it hot and sexy too. While she sucked me I could feel the jerking of her whole body as with each thrusting he drove deeply into her. This continued becoming sexier as we went. Soon I began to wonder how Joyce was feeling. Was she enjoying it too?
       I didn’t have long to entertain these thoughts when things began to happen. I heard Brian moan and the regular bumping of his thrusting slowed and almost stopped. He was over now. I know Joyce hadn’t made it so I reached down under her to her pussy.
       My hand bumped against Brian’s shaft but I was going for her clitty. She was so wet, soaking in fact. I parted the bare skin lips and found her hard nob. Just rubbing my finger against it was enough. She gasped, her body gave a jump and she fell forward on to me. Wow! So hot! She must have been almost at bursting point.

      Now we changed so Brian getting sucked while I was fucking Joyce from behind. With the cums she had and what she had been doing with Brian she was very wet and easy for me to enter her. Of course, there was Brian’s load of cum in there too.
       I watched my cock slide in under her sweet arse. I could see her pussy lips taking most of my cock. It was sexy to watch myself fucking like that. Sexy to watch my wet cock thrusting deep into her wet pussy.
      At first, Brian was soft after his cum but she was soon taking care of that problem too. First, she was working at him with her hands and then she bent down to him with her mouth. I didn’t see much of what was going on after that but the look on his face told me it must have been good.
       We continues like this for a while, me driving deep into her soaking wet cunt while she continued sucking Brian. It felt good and looked good too.
       I was looking down at her, her whole back exposed to me, from the soft brown locks of her hair to the curves of her arse. I could see those curved cheeks, pure and white. Between them deep in the crack the opening of her bum. Suddenly I was having an idea.
        I was almost ready by this point. I could feel her pussy gripping my cock pumping at me as I moved like she was trying to pull the cum from me. I could feel my cum beginning to rise now. I waited as long as I could, then at the very last moment I pulled back.
        My cock slipped from her just as the first cum burst from me. The globs flew from me, landing on her arse, mostly between her cheeks, some running down the crack over her bum hole. I reached with my fingers, running them down through my juice, rubbing it over the puckered hole there.
       Oh yes, she felt that and I think yes, liked it too. She gasped and fell forward over Brian as yet another orgasm hit her. I was still over her allowing the last of my cum to land over her beautiful arse. It was exciting to see and a sexy way to end the first part of our love-making with her.

       Yes, I did say first part. Later in the night, we both took that hot little pussy again, both giving her a good fucking and some more fun. I don’t know how Joyce usually does sex but she got a lot from us from us that night. She seemed to like it so we didn’t hold back either.


       But I also seem to notice that the next day she was a bit quiet and even slept on the couch for some time. Even with all the kids around, it didn’t bother her. It was clear this was one tired girl. 


26 comments:

  1. Hey Ian
    Look these sneaky writers got the jump on us again. They said 30th well nowhere in the world is it 30th yet.
    But Susan its another good story. I love the way you get into Mootie's head. Almost like you think like he is thinking. Like you can think like a man while still being a sexy woman.

    Best line:- "What does she think we are - hotdogs on a stick or something?" LOL that was a good one Susan.
    Janet.

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  2. I agree Janet
    But to be sure its that Susan behind this, even if Asami published it.
    Do you have anything to say for yourself Susan?
    James

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  3. So sneaky Susan again. Always up to mischief you. But watch out guys. When she replies it will be a good one.
    Brian

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  4. Oh ganging up on me already.
    Ok then, bring it on.

    First the date give is the last date of publishing not the set date.
    Second if it ready we might publish early as a special service to you guys.
    Third I have no more comments until I talk to my lawyer.
    LOL Susan.

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  5. So the case of the early publication continues.
    Let me state the case on behalf of the readers.

    1) Nowhere on your page "Important Posts" does it say you may publish early.
    2) It is well known the distress it causes readers, particularly Ian and Janet, when they discover they have missed all the fun of the comment stream.
    3) I was told by Asami three weeks ago that this story had been unloaded ready for publishing.
    4) As for going to a lawyer, Susan I would have thought you would be running from one.

    LOL James.

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    1. Oh we are so clever, aren't we?
      So if its well known we publish early, what's your problem then?
      LOL.

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  6. Now that we have reached the official publishing date, in New Zealand at least, I feel it is time I can comment on your story. Up until now I have refrained from doing so.

    It was clearly your work Susan but as has been said above there were a number of Mootie's thoughts and comments that were very likely how a male would think. Mootie's reaction to getting hugged by Joyce. His thinking about her but not sure how it would go. Personally I'm a bit surprised you wrote about him being confused like that. I would have thought that sex with this Australian couple would have been obvious.

    But there were also a few female hits against makes as well. For example saying, "wives would have it worked out before us men even knew we had a problem." Really Susan? You can help yourself, can you?

    Your build up to the sex went well. I enjoyed reading it. The sex was different to the last story but again there was that surprise, the twist in the story where Joyce goes with each man, similar to what happened with the girls and Jeremy, then suddenly Joyce is in a three-some. I liked that. Good sex scene, laid out clearly, just enough detail.

    Yes, Susan a good story. Thank you of the effort you put into it.
    James & Raviprabha.

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  7. Hello all
    Once again I'm a bit late to the party...and what a party. Great sex scenes Susan, this is Sexy Sue at her best. You writers have often said its difficult writing sex scenes, but you do seem to be able to pull ideas out again and again. The build up has become as good as the sex and I think thats one of the reasons we keep coming back for more
    Now to the publishing schedule, whats the problem guys? These girls (and boys) like to tease, treat, excite and reward. That is another one of the reasons we keep coming back.
    James...thank you for your clear and concise setting out the case on behalf of the Letters Appreciation Society, and despite what I have said above I do believe they would be found guilty of all charges. So now to the punishment - Janet have you any ideas?
    Ian

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  8. Thanks Ian,
    Glad you liked it. Yes as you said above we like to tease, treat, excite and reward. We do it in the comments and publishing but more to the fact in our stories too.
    I want to get to know the people I write about in our stories. Guys like Steve, Jeevan, Sarvesh and Mootie seems like fun. I'd love to meet them and take them to bed. Girls like Amita and Hansini, got some fight, don't take any shit from the guys. Girls like Lizamoa, Jenny and Katrina are gentle like my friend Shandra. Girls like Shanti, the strong willed challenge of Anne.
    To me sex is fun but its not just "You look hot," then clothes come off and into bed. There is always the build up, something going on that leads to the sex. Last night all the fun started when Ayaka challenged one of the guys to a Strip Chess game. Sex with me is as much a mind game as a physical game. I joke, laugh and shoot off one line jokes a lot so if you connect with me in the mind game, talking joking etc, then you're more likely to connect with me in the physical game. Other girls here are attracted differently than that. Its what makes the world interesting - we are all different.

    Now my punishment! I'm so guilty that I throw myself at the mercy of the court. How many orgasm's is it going to be this time, judges?
    Sexy Sue.

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    1. I'm very impressed by your obvious heart feLtd honestly Susan nd taking that into account in think an appropriate punishment would be one orgasm
      Ian

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    2. Only one, Ian! Sure the crime must deserve much more than that?
      Sexy Susan.

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    3. You don't deserve any orgasms. Give them all to me. Your punishment is you have to watch. LOL
      Anne

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  9. Nice story Susan. Janet just showed it to me this morning.
    I enjoyed the comment Stream too. You've laid it out well in your comment above Susan. I could picture you in my mind as you once told us something similar when we were there for the wedding.

    My one question - how could orgasms be considered a punishment. A good hard slap on your arse would be more likely. And remember you were not so big and tough for me to do that too.
    Wayne

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  10. So for once some man got the best of Susan. Gave her arse the wacking she always deserved.
    Anne

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  11. Do we have to bring that story up again, guys?
    Just for the record, I didn't give in. I only stopped fighting because it was upsetting my daughter.
    Susan

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  12. Thanks Susan for another good story. We always enjoy your posts. Been reading this for a couple of years now.
    Over time your writing style has changed. The sex scenes have become better. I've seen many stories from other online sources and as a woman I find many of the sex scenes a turn off. As you have said above Susan, sex is more than just the actual act of a cock entering a woman. You also mentioned that sex is as much in the mind as physical. I agree whole heartedly to this. I think that might be what makes the difference with your stories.

    Oh we both love the comment streams too. I like that name "Comment Streams"
    Ginger and Fred.

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  13. Hello to all my friends, you naughty story writers
    and the naughty readers, Ian, Janet, James and others.

    I am sorry my usual comments are so late, as some of you will know, this old lady has got herself into the hospital. The watercress looked so good, I had my shoes off, in the cold water harvesting it. I got a chill and then a cold that became pneumonia. Here I am in Hospital.

    Thank you for the lovely flowers Anne. And the manuka honey and lemons. The nurses are making a hot drink from them before I sleep. Yes, Allan, I know I’m a silly old woman, I don’t need you reminding me. Cheeky Pakeha (white) boy!

    Busted!!!
    I asked my nephew to bring my laptop in. He knows these computer software things, so I asked him to fix some problems too. He brought it in and now everything is good. When the whanau (family) stepped away he whispered to me he found a link to a blog. This blog! I told him I read it to correct their grammar. He said sure, he is reading it for the scientific value. He came back himself next day and we had a lovely chat about the people of the stories. So now I have a partner in crime.
    He has set it up enlarged so while the text is seen Asami’s photo is hidden. Sorry Asami. Now nobody will wonder what an old lady is doing perving Japanese girls in bikinis. LOL

    Opps! Stop the LOL – I’m attracting too much attention.

    Nice story Susan. Have plenty of time on my hands. I will dissect it line by line – word by word, in my next comment.
    Moa

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    1. We are sorry to hear you are sick Moa.
      Hope you get well soon. We love your comments and you've done so much to improve the stories.
      Julie & Brian.

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    2. My best wishes for a speedy recovery as well, Moa.
      (Nothing to correct in that I hope!) Lol
      Ian

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    3. Hi Moa
      So pleased to here you are doing better.
      Looking forward to your comments here. Like it when you kick Susan's ass. No one else seem able too.
      You have a partner in crime. LOL I like that. I hope he is reading the old stories first.
      Say Hi to him from all of us.
      James & Raviprabha.

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    4. I'm sure you don't go around kicking arse, Moa.
      But if you want to kick the 'Cheeky Pakeha Boy' Anne and I would be happy to hold him for you.

      Looking forward to your comments on this story.
      Susan

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    5. Temptation Susan.
      Don't tempt me. LOL
      Moa.

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    6. My Dear Susan
      You will have received my email listing ten changes to your story. Three are mistakes which need fixing while the others are suggestions you may wish to use. All are minor and will make no difference to the theme and flow of your story.

      Now to the story itself. I like the parallel account of the early part of their evening. You do this well, taking a different view point of the same scenes / conversations and expanding on them.
      Now we come to the sex scenes. This were told from the male point of view but written by you Susan, a female. It always amazes me how you can do this and make it read convincing. I've heard man agree with this too.
      Finally comes the three-some scenes which we had been promised. Good detail so we knew what was going on but not so detailed that it becomes bogged down. Nice ended with his cum on her behind. That was a bit sexy for me!
      Yes Susan - good story - good work girl.
      Moa

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    7. Found your email and made all the changes. (all 10). They all made sense and I felt worth doing.
      Don't worry guys nothing important got changed.
      Susan

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    8. What is this Moa?
      Two mistakes in the one comment. Please remind me to give you a class in English grammar and spelling when you came to stay next week.
      Allan.

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    9. 'Cheeky Pakeha Boy'
      Susan is that arse kicking offer still open.
      Moa

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