Hi from Awesome Anne.
Here we are at the end of the wedding holiday. Katrina is married to David, they have all had a lot of fun, now they are all going home. There will be three leaving India stories, of which this is the first. We see the leaving India through the eyes of someone who is not leaving, staying behind in India.
I chose Amita because she is one of my favourite Indian characters. I also chose her as it gave me a chance to work with Shanti and Sarvesh again too. Have some more fun with those two!
A few months back when James wrote his story "Living Statues" his approach intrigued me. The idea of daydreaming about sex that has gone before rather than telling of the sex while it happened. I decided to give this a go too. That is where the sex scenes came from.
The sex scenes needed to be a contrast as you would expect between these two couples. It is their personalities that makes it. Shanti refusing to give in to Sarvesh, while he needed to be in charge. With Amita and Mike, it was the total opposite, both working together to make some great sex.
At the last moment, I moved that entire sex scene between Sarvesh and Shanti to much later point in the story, to when Amita was in the room they had been in, dreaming about what she had heard from Shanti. Hope it works better here.
I wanted to take Amita through a variety of moods and emotions as she deals with her friends leaving for their homes. This had to be an emotional time for her, with tears, through to happiness. Some even tried to cheer her up with the odd joke too. It had to be all there as we would expect with a complex character like Amita.
Allan snr wrote that story about Nishi the maid. (Story 216 Part Four) I thought I would support him by writing her into my story as well. Joseph thinks he saw a maid downstairs while in the other story she told Steve she was hiding, waiting for Joseph to go so she could come up the stairs. There is a connection there, making the two stories complement each other.
So there it is. All done and about to be published.
Go read it. Enjoy the story,
Anne.
So Anne,
ReplyDeleteMust husband was right. He said you would sneak this in a day early particularly since tomorrow is a holiday. I wonder how many are going to find this has been published early.
I like the background photo of Reshma too. Under the waterfall like that is a bit different as you can't tell who she is.
Trina
Yes I see my photo is there this time. Its a very old one. Maybe you guys need to use some more recent photos.
DeleteI enjoyed your background Anne. Gave me some insight on what you were trying to achieve. I would like to see you do more with many of these backgrounds as I like seeing more of the writing process. Where the ideas and stories came from.
Reshma
Yes, I agree with you Reshma. I think more could be done with our backgrounds. To often they are rushed at the last moment, just before publishing. I'd like to see some funny or sexy real stories included too.
DeleteAnne
Don't get rid of that photo Reshma. They way that bikini fits your body is amazing.
DeleteIt fits so well with the theme of this blog.
Paul
I like that photo too. Maybe we could have seen your face Reshma but then a photo like that is not really about the face is it. A beautiful body barely hidden by a tiny bikini. Lovely.
DeleteWayne
Do not touch that photo Reshma. It fits well here.
DeleteSee what Paul says above regarding how your body is highlighted by the bikini. I am sure many men have noticed that. My husband did. So leave it for them to enjoy. Its a very sexy photo.
Sakura
We are together at Sayako's apartment.
DeleteWe have just finished reading this story and discussion began surrounding it. I think we all agree that the contrast in love-making styles is good. Leaving them both. We also didn't see much problem with that second sex scene. It is fitting that Amita will think of what happened while standing in that room. I didn't see any problem with using Shanti's words. Only one of the four of us even noticed the change there and he was more interested in the sex. LOL
Tukiko.
Anne, you did well with this story. I liked it a lot!
ReplyDeleteYou captured the idea of Amita dreaming about the sex she had the night before while she waited for her husband in the shower. I am surprised she wasn't in the shower with him which is more your style. That first day-dream story worked well. You followed the way James did it in Living Statues. But the second day-dream didn't fit so well. The location in the story was very good but it seems suddenly Shanti is there telling the story. No sure how you could change this unless you write as - he said, she said, he did, she did. But you still have the problem of Amita telling a story she didn't see.
Kala.
We agree with you about that second sex scene. Anne and I looked at changing it but think it would take a lot of work. It probably isn't worth doing.
DeleteSusan
This story was a lovely bit of writing Anne. Ronnie and I both enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteSome will say that this story might not be as good as others you have written but you Anne go out and experiment with your writing. You try new things and use new ideas. This happened here I see. Everyone, don't try and measure which story is better. Just enjoy each story as it was written.
Anne wanted to capture a woman going through a very emotional time. Her friends were leaving after what had been a very special time. She was sad. She is going to miss them. That is the point behind this story. We get it Anne.
Now putting Shanti and Sarvesh again was good. She was quite hard on him I think but he seems to really take it from her. I have a feeling she can get away with saying things even his wife wouldn't say. See the last bit at the end of their sex session. Complementing each other but still not giving in the each other. Don't you just love these two in action together.
With Amita, Sarvesh admits he has feeling for Shanti. I'm sure Shanti would admit that too.
Ronnie & Mary
Thanks Mary,
DeleteWhile I am writing this you are sitting across the table having a coffee but I feel I need to acknowledge you publicially.
Like many readers you got what I was trying to do with this story. I think you have expressed it the best. It was my intention to capture Amita's emotion. She was upset as I would expect I would be too. So lets enjoy that in this story.
I loved playing with Amita & Sarvesh. They have great personalities and I love writing them. Had lots of laughs while I was doing it. Still makes me smile when I read it again. As for fighting like that, I could say I'd never do that but so many of you know that would be wrong. So lets say I've been guilty of fighting in the bed once or twice.
Awesome Anne.
Only once or twice Anne? Ha! Ha! Another joke.
DeleteBrian.