Anne here.
Hello from Susan and Rajah too.
Hello from Susan and Rajah too.
We have come to the first big milestone of the Tukiko series when she goes off with Mike, together into the sand dunes. Since this entire part was intended to be a huge sex scene, I was called in to help. We read over the two stories where Tikiko had been involved in sex scenes and noticed she came across as confident with sex but shy to show that confidence in front of her parents. I asked the question: - What if she wasn't that confident? What if her full knowledge of sex had been gained from being with boys her own age who didn't really know a lot either?
We wrote this sex scene as if she has performed fairly well with Joseph under the shelter of her mother Sayako. Now she was on her own, flying solo with Mike, you could say, her lack of experience began to show with her blow-job skills. This shattered her confidence a bit as she realised she was out of her league with this far more experienced man. Fortunately, Mike picks up on it quickly and gently helps her along.
Regards everyone - Susan.
We wrote this sex scene as if she has performed fairly well with Joseph under the shelter of her mother Sayako. Now she was on her own, flying solo with Mike, you could say, her lack of experience began to show with her blow-job skills. This shattered her confidence a bit as she realised she was out of her league with this far more experienced man. Fortunately, Mike picks up on it quickly and gently helps her along.
Regards everyone - Susan.
Suddenly, while she is riding Mike cowgirl style, Tukiko discovers that she is being watched by some people on the hillside behind them. Mike encourages her to carry on and not worry about them watching but she struggles with this.
It was obvious, this was going to be a difficult conversation to write so Anne and Allan were called in to help. After lots of discussions, it was decided to leave Tukiko sitting on top of Mike with his cock still deep inside her. That position was chosen for that very reason. Mike convinces her to carry on by seducing her with some sexy nipple play. Eventually, she starts moving her hips, starts fucking him again and realises she kind of likes people watching while she fucks. Likes it enough that she wants to do it again while they are still watching.
Regards from Anne and Allan.
It was obvious, this was going to be a difficult conversation to write so Anne and Allan were called in to help. After lots of discussions, it was decided to leave Tukiko sitting on top of Mike with his cock still deep inside her. That position was chosen for that very reason. Mike convinces her to carry on by seducing her with some sexy nipple play. Eventually, she starts moving her hips, starts fucking him again and realises she kind of likes people watching while she fucks. Likes it enough that she wants to do it again while they are still watching.
Regards from Anne and Allan.
Now we get to the final section of this story where Mike and Tukiko discover an orgy going on with Tukiko's parents, Hirohiko and Sayako.
Back in Story 248 Part Three, we asked Ayaka to put in a conversation I wrote between Steve and Peter in the surf where they decided if Sayako was going to get laid it was going to be with them. In that scene, they decide to ask their wives to help by distracting Hirohiko. Did their plan work? In that story, we purposely left it unsaid. Well, it seems to have because here they were in the hollow below where Tukiko and Mike were watching.
Another difficult scene where we have eight people involved in sexual activities. Down in the hollow are two threesomes: - Two white men with Sayako and Two white women with Harohiko who all join together for the final sexual position with Sayako being fucked by five people at once. Meanwhile, on the dune behind them, Tukiko and Mike are fucking again while they watched.
The method we selected to do this was by switching between those in the hollow and those on the sand dune, both seen through the eyes of Tukiko. In doing this, Tukiko was shown even more possible ways of having sex with more than two people. Something she might be trying herself very soon.
Regards to all our readers - Rajah.
Back in Story 248 Part Three, we asked Ayaka to put in a conversation I wrote between Steve and Peter in the surf where they decided if Sayako was going to get laid it was going to be with them. In that scene, they decide to ask their wives to help by distracting Hirohiko. Did their plan work? In that story, we purposely left it unsaid. Well, it seems to have because here they were in the hollow below where Tukiko and Mike were watching.
Another difficult scene where we have eight people involved in sexual activities. Down in the hollow are two threesomes: - Two white men with Sayako and Two white women with Harohiko who all join together for the final sexual position with Sayako being fucked by five people at once. Meanwhile, on the dune behind them, Tukiko and Mike are fucking again while they watched.
The method we selected to do this was by switching between those in the hollow and those on the sand dune, both seen through the eyes of Tukiko. In doing this, Tukiko was shown even more possible ways of having sex with more than two people. Something she might be trying herself very soon.
Regards to all our readers - Rajah.
Kia kaka - Kia Kaha.
Be safe - Be strong.
Anne, Allan jr, Susan and Rajah.
Be safe - Be strong.
Anne, Allan jr, Susan and Rajah.
One of the better parts of this site are the backgrounds. This one is a good example. It gives us an insight into the writing process and where ideas came from. It also shows you the strengths of different writers, eg Allan jr -conversations, Susan - sex scenes. You are afraid to tape into these talents when needed.
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Brian
This blog has been under going a lot of changes over the last few months. Part of this is new and exciting ways of improving out writing. I'm glad you are enjoying the results of this.
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The construction of this sex scene was divided into a number of sub-sections to help with the writing. Each section was laid out with a goal to be achieved. Then we were able to start writing in a number of places.
ReplyDeleteIt quickly became clear that the story itself was made up of three clear sections, the foreplay, the exhibitionism and the voyageurism.
Perhaps the hardest part was the voyageurism where there were actually 3 sex scenes going on at once, each highly dependent on the others.
The final part to be completed was the part where Mike was try to convince Tukiko to carry on fucking when she discovered she was being watched.
I am very pleased with the results of this one.
Sexy Sue.
Interesting how you and Anne write like that.
DeleteI work off an outline that lists items and events in the order they will appear. Notes are added for anything I particularly want to mention. Then I start writing. I usually get most of what I want to say in one hit because I have thought about it and got the story laid out in my head.
Then it just a matter of reading through and making the necessary changes and improvements.
Reshma.
Kia ora.
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This series on this Japanese has led to some good stories and further improvement in writing too.
But I can't help wondering if you are becoming distracted from the main story. But now, let's look at this story in front of us.
First major highlight is that huge sex scene between Mike and Tukiko. It has some exciting sex action but you write it in a way that it's easy to follow. The thing that stood out for me was her lack of experience. I didn't see this so much when Tukiko was with Joseph but she was very nervous with Mike. Interesting!
Now the second highlight for me was the scene where Tukiko and Mike were watching the group sex. Orgy you could say. To me, that was a difficult scene to write but I think you handled it well. I measure a sex scene by how well I can follow and understand the action.
Dropping detail in favour of focusing on following the action was probably that right way to go here. Dividing it into little bite size bits was the way to go here too.
Well done, an enjoyable and sexy read. This story really achieved and delivered.
Moa
All these improved stories are looking very good. I know, I have been involved in the computer work side and developing this new story layout but I must add here that I like the results we are achieving. They go with the rewriting going into each story.
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