Hello from Rochelle,
This was a hard story for me because of Allan, the brains behind these three stories about camping at the Kai Iwi Lakes. He gave me a number of objectives that I had to achieve which restricted my scope in what I could write. But when you see Stories 232 - 234 together, you will realise why it had to be like this.
The main objective here was to set the scene for the next few stories. I had to select who was going and get them to the camp. Allan came in and overwrote my work by adding some new characters, a family of four, Simon & Deanna and their daughters, Roxanna and Rachael. The younger daughter didn't actually get mentioned by name in my story. They have only been seen once before, at another nude camp back in Story 81 Nude BullRush. This story had also been written by Allan, under the character name of Mike.
Allan here. (Anne's Allan)
Working with Rochelle was fun. She is a smart lady and sexy too. One afternoon she was over here and we were working on the story. Things got a bit hot between us and turned very sexual when I took her sitting on the office desk. It was good sex, extra hot because it was totally unexpected.
When it was looking like this becoming an evening, suddenly Anne and Susan announced they were going over to 'look after' Rochelle's husband, Marceau because Rochelle was busy getting inspiration for this story. I hear Marceau was very happy with that arrangement too. So happy in fact, it was very late when he left for work the following morning. (Naughty Girls!)
So, what could I do to spice up this rather 'dry story'? I suggested that we cover some of the BullRush games without too much detail. This worked ok becoming more detailed than we intended. But we still wanted something more like a sex scene. It was then that we came up with the evening stripping contest. While it became more like people taking turns than an actual contest, it did have a few sexy scenes and became the centrepiece of our story.
Of course, through all this was I wanted to stay on our goal of relationship-building between Shanti & Mike and Simon & Deanna. Yes, I have plans for them we get to Story 233.
Right from Lizamoa giving herself a pussy rub after stripping meant that this contest would be much more X-rated. We tried to make things getting progressively sexier as the contest went on. We also used this as a chance for our two leading couples, Shanti & Mike and Deanna & Simon to play at a bit more too. Rochelle was against Mike giving Deanna an orgasm at this point but finally, we went with that.
Now Anne had a request on this story too. She wanted to involve some of the older kids without it becoming sexy. We are not into any under-aged sex but in our real lives, our children have grown up with nudity around the pools etc. Like in the stories, the plan is to keep the kids away from the more sexual activities too.
But these children would become important characters when we get to Letters the Next Generation. If we ever get there.
The main objective here was to set the scene for the next few stories. I had to select who was going and get them to the camp. Allan came in and overwrote my work by adding some new characters, a family of four, Simon & Deanna and their daughters, Roxanna and Rachael. The younger daughter didn't actually get mentioned by name in my story. They have only been seen once before, at another nude camp back in Story 81 Nude BullRush. This story had also been written by Allan, under the character name of Mike.
Allan here. (Anne's Allan)
Working with Rochelle was fun. She is a smart lady and sexy too. One afternoon she was over here and we were working on the story. Things got a bit hot between us and turned very sexual when I took her sitting on the office desk. It was good sex, extra hot because it was totally unexpected.
When it was looking like this becoming an evening, suddenly Anne and Susan announced they were going over to 'look after' Rochelle's husband, Marceau because Rochelle was busy getting inspiration for this story. I hear Marceau was very happy with that arrangement too. So happy in fact, it was very late when he left for work the following morning. (Naughty Girls!)
So, what could I do to spice up this rather 'dry story'? I suggested that we cover some of the BullRush games without too much detail. This worked ok becoming more detailed than we intended. But we still wanted something more like a sex scene. It was then that we came up with the evening stripping contest. While it became more like people taking turns than an actual contest, it did have a few sexy scenes and became the centrepiece of our story.
Of course, through all this was I wanted to stay on our goal of relationship-building between Shanti & Mike and Simon & Deanna. Yes, I have plans for them we get to Story 233.
Right from Lizamoa giving herself a pussy rub after stripping meant that this contest would be much more X-rated. We tried to make things getting progressively sexier as the contest went on. We also used this as a chance for our two leading couples, Shanti & Mike and Deanna & Simon to play at a bit more too. Rochelle was against Mike giving Deanna an orgasm at this point but finally, we went with that.
Now Anne had a request on this story too. She wanted to involve some of the older kids without it becoming sexy. We are not into any under-aged sex but in our real lives, our children have grown up with nudity around the pools etc. Like in the stories, the plan is to keep the kids away from the more sexual activities too.
But these children would become important characters when we get to Letters the Next Generation. If we ever get there.
Allan being a naughty boy and fucking the poor French girl. He even sends his accomplices off to distract her husband too, Very naughty boy this one! LOL
ReplyDeleteJust let me know when you want me to leave my door unlocked.
Asami.
Ha! Ha! Asami,
DeleteYou think you are smart do you? Well, w
Who was naughty last weekend with sisters husband?
Allan.
Hello, naughty writers and reader, all my dear friends.
ReplyDeleteYes I am in my favourite seat, outside on my deck overviewing the harbour. It is a nice quiet place for me to concentrate on reading this new story.
Allan and Rochelle, it is a good one as I see it as a setting up story where you are preparing for stories that will follow. It is fairly obvious the Shanti & Mike will be swapping with Deanna & Simon. But what else will there be. Content Index say something to do with Greesham, the older lady. Joseph's mother. Is this going to be another shock for poor Joseph, see what is mother is capable of? Us old ladies can surprise you. Always remember that! We are still women and still might be in for a bit of fun, if you get my meaning.
Now, the story. I'm going to have to be a bit hard on this one. It is a but messy and jumps around from subject to subject a bit. I can see you didn't want to get into any great details with two scenes that could have become stories by themselves.
Now technically, it was a bit poor too. I found 12 mistakes that were clearly mistakes and a few others that could have gone either way. Looks like you've tidied these up now. The worst was mixing Peter and Steve during the BullRush game. What happened here? Something went wrong as you wrote that section.
So as I said above, now the corrections are done, I would give it a 'good'. Not your best by a long way but it fits here and does the job you intended.
How I see it.
Love, Moa.
Ha! Ha! Ok, Moa, you have caught me out. I wrote that section on the BullRush game using Steve as the man in the centre. Then I went back to Story 81 and discovered it was Peter in the centre so I tried to change that in this story too but it seems there were two places where I missed changing their names.
DeleteLOL Allan.
LOL.
DeleteAllan, can I confess to a tiny but of enjoyment, sweetness, at catching you out?
Moa.
A tiny bit of enjoyment, Moa. I don't think so. "Sweet" means big I think. Well, enjoy your little victory.
DeleteThanks you your proof reading my story and thanks for kicking my arse. Not that I ever deserve it.
Allan.
Allan, you don't ever need your arse kicked! Ha! Ha! Funny joke!
DeleteGlad to see you still have your sense of humour.
Awesome Anne.
As I remember, you are Allan's partner Anne.
DeleteSo why are you throwing shit at him.
You should be defending him.
Deanna.
Ha! Ha!
DeleteSomeone has to do it.
Anne